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you told me
we walked among dead -
that we're all
(nec)romanticists;

now, dearest, i know
why skeletons
always look like
they're smiling.
blah this is super hit or miss and i'm not sure which yet ignore me
considering taking the second stanza out. what do you think?
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AeonFlora Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Hit :)
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
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gossamerdissonance Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Writer
*poetry
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gossamerdissonance Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Writer
Freaking out because your petty is absolutely genius
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Student Writer
Ah, thank you ;v;
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i enjoy this immensely.  especially your play on (nec)romanticists.

very lovely indeed.

i also think the second stanza is nice, but i don't think it's necessarily needed.  so if you would like to take it out, don't worry.  the poem will still be great without it.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Droll! I like the second stanza.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :)
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
My pleasure!!
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empty-lungs Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
aw wow i love this ur so talented ugh
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! ;v;
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Junowaffles64 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. I love it! :happybounce: 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :la: Also for the favorite!
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Junowaffles64 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hehehe no problem, it was so well written. <3
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abrizelle Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is beautiful. I love the necromanticists line, and the second stanza. Wonderful work~
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I was unsure about the second stanza; I'm glad to know you like it. :)
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abrizelle Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No, it really ties the meaning in with the rest of the poem. I think it's beautiful ^^
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. I love it. :heart: 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you do. :heart:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
don't change anything. 
it's perfect. 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much. :hug:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're so welcome :heart:
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ebazii Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
dude dont fuckign take the second stanza out u shit
like how do you even come up with this shit
jesus christ why are you so good at this
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Student Writer
izzy omfg,,, thank,,,
cries grossly,,,
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luckyveda Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014   Digital Artist
I love it, perhaps move the second stanza to the very end? I don't know about poems though.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you.

I thought it'd sorta fit better at the end, but I think the flow would be off. I'm not sure yet. Thanks though!
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MisterTotality Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
I would not remove the second stanza.  It adds to the piece and builds on the theme.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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