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tar-tongued;

sea-brittle sugar
bones & star-
stitched

withering
waste of
fever burns &
blue lips
i'm a disappointment fifteen years in the making.
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:iconyokasobi:
Yokasobi Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Dear Poet,
In this verse you have given a glimpse
Of a story much bigger
A tale much longer
A saga much braver
A song much sadder—
Perhaps, this is all you see
But there is so much more,
I'm sure of it.
Besides—
From pain comes passion
(I know it myself)
And from passion
Comes the best poetry.
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:iconcounting-vertebrae:
counting-vertebrae Feb 19, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you so much!
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:iconyokasobi:
Yokasobi Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconskygazing:
asjdfkls i love all of it, beautiful work :heart: :iconbackhug:
i just adore the flow of words and the complication of simple words :love:

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:iconcounting-vertebrae:
counting-vertebrae Feb 4, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much. :heart: And for the favorites and the watch - I really appreciate it! :la:
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:iconskygazing:
your welcome :iconbackhug: i'm really looking forward to your future works :love:
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:iconfierydownpour479:
FieryDownpour479 Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Tar-tongued and star-stitched. There's just something about those phrases that just catch me more than anything. The whole poem is very beautiful, though :)
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:iconcounting-vertebrae:
counting-vertebrae Nov 10, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so, so much! :heart:
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:iconfierydownpour479:
FieryDownpour479 Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so very welcome! :hug:
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tubefed Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. :heart:
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