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we swallow blues instead
of talking them out. oh,
kids like us are specters,
spectacles: boys counting
rib(cage)s & (de)composing
     don't you hate
         (this body)
             is a vessel
we're deities or tomb-raiders; no
in-betweens for writers these days
hesitant to post this. it's far from my best.
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full title: we fall in love with (headaches splitting hairline fractures)
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Viol-Dove-Teshire Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Still wonderful. I like it, especially the play with the parentheses. My favorite line was
"we swallow blues instead
of talking them out."
I also, again, like the 
"boys counting
rib(cage)s & (de)composing"
It says a lot, paired with the line before it. <3
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much. Those lines in particular meant a lot to me, so I'm quite glad you liked them. :heart:
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bigbossisawsome Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
I think you just gave me hope that I could have one last chance with my ex. Well done.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I hope everything works out for the best.
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bigbossisawsome Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Thanks.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Student Writer
You're most welcome.
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bigbossisawsome Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014
:-)
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sylveda Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Incredible. So raw and powerful. I love this. 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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seriousmess Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014   Writer
Excellent! Your poems are so great, ripped right from the heart.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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magneticecho Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, those last two lines. <33 This is really beautiful. I love it. :)
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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magneticecho Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't mean to fangirl, but you're really talented and all of your poems are amazing and afbkjgxa;jncf. <333 (OK I'm done. XD)
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Aw no worries! I'm glad you like my writing! Thank you :heart: :)
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sairey Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love your poetry~!Heart 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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sairey Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
<3333
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