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we swallow blues instead
of talking them out. oh,
kids like us are specters,
spectacles: boys counting
rib(cage)s & (de)composing
     don't you hate
         (this body)
             is a vessel
we're deities or tomb-raiders; no
in-betweens for writers these days
hesitant to post this. it's far from my best.
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full title: we fall in love with (headaches splitting hairline fractures)
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honeyroastedfrost Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not sure if it's what you were going for, but this makes me think about nights when I write about something to get it out of my system and end up feeling ten times worse, as though the paper isn't soaking the feelings up but making them ricochet.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2015  Student Writer
honestly i can't remember the exact intent with this one; i think perhaps i was writing about the stigma of the tortured artist and the tragic writer? and the sense of depth or validation we give to the miserable back story. maybe i'm taking my own work to literally.

but honestly i love having open interpretations in my poetry and i think i like yours as much as my own, haha.
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Viol-Dove-Teshire Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Still wonderful. I like it, especially the play with the parentheses. My favorite line was
"we swallow blues instead
of talking them out."
I also, again, like the 
"boys counting
rib(cage)s & (de)composing"
It says a lot, paired with the line before it. <3
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much. Those lines in particular meant a lot to me, so I'm quite glad you liked them. :heart:
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bigbossisawsome Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
I think you just gave me hope that I could have one last chance with my ex. Well done.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I hope everything works out for the best.
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bigbossisawsome Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Thanks.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Student Writer
You're most welcome.
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bigbossisawsome Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014
:-)
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sylveda Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Incredible. So raw and powerful. I love this. 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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seriousmess Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent! Your poems are so great, ripped right from the heart.
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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magneticecho Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, those last two lines. <33 This is really beautiful. I love it. :)
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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magneticecho Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't mean to fangirl, but you're really talented and all of your poems are amazing and afbkjgxa;jncf. <333 (OK I'm done. XD)
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Aw no worries! I'm glad you like my writing! Thank you :heart: :)
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sairey Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love your poetry~!Heart 
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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sairey Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3333
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